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逗号拼接句


本文介绍中国二语学习者写作中常见的一种错误类型:逗号拼接句comma splice


逗号拼接句是和流水句相似的句法错误,即用逗号连接两个独立句。中国二语学习者写作中常见这类错误大概与古汉语中没有标点符号、没有像英语一样明确的句子边界有关。


可以用三种方式来改错:第一,用句号代替逗号,将逗号拼接句变成两个独立的句子;第二,加并列句连接词,把逗号拼接句变成一个并列句;第三,加复杂句连接词,变成复杂句。


接下来我们通过七个学生习作中的病句例子来看如何修改逗号拼接句。


例句一:

After a long and serious discussion, I'd like to announce here that our government's fund will be divided into six parts, all these projects are very important to our life, and here are the details about our decision.

可以改为两个独立句:

After a long and serious discussion, I'd like to announce here that our government's fund will be divided into six parts. All these projects are very important to our life, and here are the details about our decision.

也可以改为定语从句:

After a long and serious discussion, I'd like to announce here that our government's fund will be     divided into six parts, all these projects  allocated to six projects, which are very important to our life. Here are the details about our decision.


例句二

We have already studied reports from last year, after a heated discussion, we complete the plan of allocating funds of 5 million to 3 competing projects for public causes.

改为两个独立句:

We have already studied reports from last year. After a heated discussion, we complete the plan of allocating funds of 5 million to 3 competing projects for public causes.


例句三

Fund of 5,000,000 will be given to three projects, here are reasons of our decision.

首先修改冠词和介词错误。

A fund of 5,000,000 will be given to three projects, here are the reasons for our decision.

在此之上,可以改为并列句:

A fund of 5,000,000 will be given to three projects, and here are the reasons for our decision.

可以分成两句:

A fund of 5,000,000 will be given to three projects. Here are the reasons for our decision.


例句四

$2,000,000 will be spent on building affordable accommodation. House means a lot for us, it may be a symbol of home. When we have a house, don't to be that large, can give us feelings of safety.

这句中两个逗号拼接句。第一句改为原因状语从句;第二句改为让步状语从句。

$2,000,000 will be spent on the project of affordable accommodation. Having a house means a lot to us, since it is a symbol of home. Having a house, even if it is small, can give us feelings of safety.


例句五

Admittedly, reducing air pollution has to do with our daily lives ,providing free higher education and increasing school budgets that are concerned with education are important issues for country's future.

由于前后两句句义紧密,所有改为由分号连接的并列句。并删除意义不大的定语从句使句义更清晰。

Admittedly, reducing air pollution is closely related to our daily lives; providing free higher education and increasing school budgets     that are concerned with education   are important issues for country's future.


另一部分的逗号拼接句错误是由于二语学习者把连接副词和并列句、复杂句连词混淆而产生的。和后两者不同,连接副词引导独立句子。


比如例句六里的Thus是连接副词,引导独立的句子。所以应该加句号而非逗号。

例句六

Living is always in the first place for our life and a person definitely can't survive without water, thus water shortage has to be the first and the most severe problem to take over.

Living is always in the first place for our life and a person definitely can't survive without water. Thus, water shortage has to be the first issue to be addressed.


例句七中的however也是引导独立句子的连接副词。

例句七

Secondly, I regard the project about building a new school for the low-income families in the community is of the medium importance, however considering it may be less costly than buying buses, I would allocate this project with one million dollars.

  Secondly,  I regard     the project about  building a new school for the low-income families in the community      is of the medium importance   as the second important project. However, considering it may be less costly than buying buses, I would allocate this project with one million dollars.


逗号拼接句是写作中最常见的错误,也是非常容易修改的一类错误,只要足够细心,就能避免。